Saturday, October 1, 2022

Spark

 1st Oct 2022

 



Following on from last weeks story, I stay with Marie in the garden.

The  prompt word, Spark.


Marie glanced through the grubby window of the greenhouse, saw his spade hanging in the place he had always left it, saw the neat pots stacked in ordered rows, saw the seed boxes  all meticulously and lovingly  made by Frank all those years ago, and wondered what had finally pushed her over the edge, what was the spark that set her off.

When they first got married she enjoyed sharing his passion for all things horticultural, had followed him around at shows, had even done a course in flower arranging so she could make use of the many flowers that he grew, eventually becoming a teacher herself. 

However, as time went on and the children came along, it became clear to Marie that his plant obsession was the most important thing in the world to him and she would have to get on with things by herself, which , for the sake of the children and because she had loved him, she put up with.

The fact that their father showed them so little affection, she found it difficult over the years to convince her daughter and two sons that their father did actually love them, speaking well of him at all times and doing her best to encourage him on the odd occasion, usually with flowers involved, to attend events that they might be involved in. 

But she had become tired of living a lie and on that last day, the day he'd trudged over her new carpet with his muddy boots without a care for her at all, she'd been slicing onions for their dinner and suddenly, though she has no recall of the incident itself, she found herself looking down at his body, blood dripping from the knife she held in her hand.

"This is a good spot for you, right where you'd want to be," she said to her dead husband as she rolled him into the hole she'd dug outside his greenhouse, while she wondered how she would get his blood out of her new carpet.   

11 comments :

  1. Well, that was unexpected, but fully deserved. I think my wife would have treated me the same way. We always take our shoes off when entering our home as we consider it sacred ground.

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    1. Thanks for your comment. It was a bit drastic though, wasn't it? I've never been that bothered about the carpet, but the obsession thing, now, that's another matter.

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  2. Sometimes a person just goes over the edge, and it's so sad.

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    1. Yes, it was just the last straw. Maybe none of us would resort to such behaviour as Marie, but we do meet those times of stress just the same.

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  3. It looks like they needed pastoral counseling. I wonder how she is handling the guilt.

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    1. You're right, Frank. They did need help. And, I'd say she's not handling the guilt that well and is surprised that she's got away with it, although she's now living her own "sentence". Imagine!!!

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  4. Slow down, speak first, and stay in the moment before you strike. Yes, th as t was a shocking, but informative twist!

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  5. Thank you. Yes, she should have dealt with it sooner. The build up of resentment is never good. It's so damaging...

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  6. Dear Grams,
    That is a BIZARRE story.
    So, that means that all farmers, those that work in horticulture or are on tough jobs away from home are labeled as—non loving?!
    Guess, most would applaud it to have a husband like that—instead of a couch potato who is always around his kids but not living as a good example.
    May God have mercy on her!
    Hugs,
    Mariette

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    1. Hi Mariette, thank you so much for your comment. And I can see why you would think what you do. Unfortunately I failed to convey well enough the idea that, the husband was indeed unloving and after years of Marie being ignored and treated badly by him, his walking across the new carpet was the straw that broke the camels back and she finally snapped.
      You can't always get into the printed word, especially with the six sentence constraint, all the finer details and emotions that are moving a characters actions.
      Also, this six doesn't stand alone but follows from the six of the previous week, so that might have had something to do with the misunderstanding. There were nuances I'd introduced before that I didn't recap on.

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